delerak
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Post by delerak on Nov 2, 2015 3:49:14 GMT -5
I've got nothing but time and so I've decided to give NanoWriMO another go. I failed a few years back but this time I think I'll do okay! Anyone else wanna join me?
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Post by punished ppurg on Nov 2, 2015 10:31:27 GMT -5
Unless we're putting 50,000 words down as an anthology of shadowboard criticism, I don't think there'll be much of a draw 'round these parts.
I'm working on a novella idea in my mind but I don't feel like pushing it out just this month. Maybe I'll pick it up, who knows.
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Post by grumble on Nov 2, 2015 19:25:16 GMT -5
I sometimes write wacky short stories, then delete them. Sometimes, they're more drawn out than that. I still can't write anything up to my standards.
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delerak
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Post by delerak on Nov 2, 2015 19:50:21 GMT -5
I'm at 1500 words already. I'm doing a fanfiction on Darksun. Hopefully it turns out okay!
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punished ppurg
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Post by punished ppurg on Nov 3, 2015 0:26:16 GMT -5
Godspeed! Post it here if you are man enough once you're done. I'd like to give it a perusal.
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delerak
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Post by delerak on Nov 3, 2015 2:32:19 GMT -5
Sure thing. I'm at 2500 words! Here is the first part.
Indra sat patiently within the tent, head bent forward at an angle as the hair around his mohawk was shaved. Within the tent hung various trinkets and jewelry; from amethyst beads to a comb carved from mekillot bone.
“Almost done.” The voice behind him was flat and emotionless in tone, like the scraping of the razor across Indra’s skull.
“We leave soon.” Indra glanced to the sundial sitting just outside the tent. Almost high sun. He felt his nerves wrenching his guts. I cannot doubt myself right now. This isn’t just about me. It is for the tribe. What have I done. Scorcher. Indra was an elf, a minority in the city-state compared to humans and dwarves both of which procreated far more frequently than the Sun Runners. Nomadic are the elves of Athas and never do they settle down for very long to raise a family. Either you keep the pace or perish. This was especially true with the Sun Runners, one of the most nomadic, most flighty tribes in the Tablelands. Never do they stay long in one place, and their encampments range from every city-state, thousands of elves spread out across the Known, with one purpose: to live for the run, to love fiercely, and to enjoy what little pleasures exist on the dying planet.
The sinuous feminine figure behind Indra dipped the obsidian bladed razor into a pan of filthy water. “All done.”
Indra rose to his full height of seven and a half feet and turned to face his mate, he looked down on her as he did near every other elf in his tribe, near every other humanoid in the Known. She wiped the blade off on a beaded vest of thick tembo hide, her blue eyes searching the ground, no one could abide Indra’s gaze for long, and for her as his lover it was cruel to look into that tortured soul. “Shiloh.” Indra reached out with long nimble fingers and touched her chin, lifting her face. “Your head should always be held up with the pride of the tribe at stake.” She comes from a simpler upbringing than myself. Being born in the city has made her soft. Shiloh managed a sad smile.
“We can leave. Just leave this place. We don’t need to see him.“
“Quiet!” Indra spoke harshly, perhaps too harsh, causing Shiloh to wince. She was unaccustomed to this brutal new way of life. The fact that now was no time for emotional conversation. “You were born in Urik. I need you here now.”
Shiloh managed a faint nod, “I know who it is we go to meet. He is a living legend within these walls.”
“The Champion of Urik. A legend he may be within these walls. But outside these walls, in the dust, the blood and the sun from whence I came, I am a legend. He will learn that soon enough.” As if saying those words made them true. Indra moved to the tent and stepped out into the Elven Markets of Urik. Stands and carts were setup all around, the chaos of mid-day was in full swing. Hundreds of people walked about, wheeling and dealing with the elven merchants. Indra stood out, towering over all around him; his garb was a simple leather vest, a breechcloth and a pouched belt. Barefoot he strode across the dusty market, two other elves with brightly dyed sandcloth dusters fell in line with him and his mate. Many of the crowds parted before him. Shiloh treaded slightly behind. “When we arrive I want you to greet him in standard Urikite fashion, my Urikite is not as good as yours.” “I don’t care for formalities, but I won’t insult our host.” Shiloh smirked in response and spoke in her Urikite accented elvish, “As you wish my Chief.”
Indra snorted in derision at the comment as he his large bare feet slapped against the paved stones of the market.
Not long after their quickened pace through the Elven Market Indra picked up the pace, into a jog and then a run, all four of them kept the same pace, they moved with the grace of one who has ran countless mileage under the harsh athasian sun. Through alleys and roadways they wended their path, from Obsidian Road to Way of the Lion, they ran and eventually reached their destination, the entrance to Destiny’s Kingdom, the palace of Urik’s monarch.
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delerak
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Post by delerak on Nov 5, 2015 2:33:11 GMT -5
powered thru today. I've got like 7 scenes going on simultaneously but it's coming together I think! I'm at 4100 words so far.
Javed picked up the stiff parchment, skimming the message. It was a request by one of the many nobles of the city. More soldiers for the noble quarter? Javed never fully understood why Hamanu kept the nobles in power. He has personally argued for hours with his King on doing away with the archaic system but to no avail. Javed came to the realization that his King, the all-knowing, the omniscient, the Lion of Urik only gives power and favor to those whom are a benefit to himself and Urik. And that is why Javed has been the Champion of Urik for forty years. Javed was only fourteen when he began working for the Urik templarate, an elf from Joiner’s Square with an obsidian dagger and three ceramic bits to his name. He started as a courier, running messages from one templar to another, eventually he was trusted enough to carry the messages of nobles, the tips weren’t that bad but Javed was meant for more. On one particularly sweltering day Javed now almost seventeen years old was delivering a message from a war bureau templar to House Stel’s noble estate. A job he had done a dozen times before. This time would be different. The slave that normally answered the gate told Javed to wait. He thought it funny because he never waited, just dropped off the scroll with the steward of the House. Javed wiped at the perspiration on his brow and glared at the crimson sky. Not long went by and the gates swung open once more, the steward motioned him inside. Javed frowned and looked the pale dwarf up and down. “I’m just here to drop off a letter.” Javed protested in thickly accented Urikite common.
“My master bid you enter. He wishes to meet with the one responsible for the timely delivery of his messages to the templarate all these years.” The dwarven slave bowed his head and stepped to the side, holding arm toward the estate.
Javed looked down the paved cobblestone path to the large noble estate and sighed. Won’t be getting home early today. He stepped through the gates and onto the cobblestones, long legs carrying him much quicker than the dwarf could ever hope to achieve. Javed stopped in front of the estate doors, both made from molded agafari, rare this far from the city-state of Gulg and her forests. The dwarf caught up and quickly pushed the doors open, waving two Stel guards away as they came to investigate. “This elf has been summoned by our Lord.”
Javed looked at the guards with little worry, he had learned to defend himself years ago and his abilities with psychometabolism and telepathy were something he trained day and night. With but a thought Javed sapped his metabolism, he felt the surge of energy as the blood began to flow more quickly and his tendons tightened their grip upon his muscles and skeleton. Giants strength. The first thing I taught myself. Javed smiled and stepped into the estate.
The entrance of the estate was a large foyer with two massive flags displaying the black flag of Stel. Javed looked upon the walls and saw the weapons and armor that the dynastic merchant house was known for peddling. The premiere weapons and armor dealer in the city was House Stel and they were one of the most powerful families in the Tyr region, their reach extending to every city-state in the Tablelands. The dwarven slave spoke in a hushed tone, “Please come with me.” Javed followed the dwarf through a series of doors and a single staircase. Javed noticed that each hall was practical in design with little to no decoration. They reached two large double doors and the dwarf swung them open and stood aside. Inside was what appeared to be a study, with bookcases lining the wall and a large table in the middle of the room with several high-backed chairs. Javed stepped inside reluctantly, his muscles tightening from the psionic strength flowing through them. The doors quietly shut behind him and he felt a contact touch his mind. Javeds initial reaction was defense and so he quickly erected high stone walls around his mind, a manifestation of the city-state of Urik. “Very good.” Came a voice from one of the large high-backed chairs facing away from Javed. Javed approached, knowing that his knowledge of the Way was superior to this individual. As Javed reached the chair he came around and looked down on a tiny pale man “Please. Sit.” He gestured to the chair across from his own. Javed frowned and moved to the chair, knowing full well the power that this noble could wield with words alone. Javed sat uncomfortably, more accustomed to crouching and running with his long limbs, the chair felt claustrophobic, the whole room felt claustrophobic. “My Lord.” Javed bowed his head in acquiescence to the noble before lifting his gaze and surveying him more critically; he was a middle-aged human with a balding head, short and almost sickly pale he couldn’t have painted a more starkly contrasted picture to the six and a half foot tall, black-skinned Javed. The noble wore a silk robe painted with the black scimitar of House Stel, a simple leather swordbelt wrapped his lithe waist and both of his wrists were bejeweled with plain obsidian bracelets, a silver signet ring gleamed in the light. That ring was worth more than Javed’s life.
“My letter if you please.” The man spoke with the common Urikite with a neutral accent, a sign that he was born and raised in Urik, or adeptly trained at hiding his heritage. Javed swung his satchel to his lap and flipped several long braids of his dark hair over a shoulder before reaching in to retrieve the thickly bound scroll of parchment and place it on the table. A signet ring had sealed the parchment; a roaring lion in yellow ink, the universal indicator for the Lion’s war bureau. The letter lifted into the air and levitated over to the nobles lap. Javed managed a smirk at the show of telepathy. Is he trying to impress me?
“I am Lord Isar Stel.” He pulled a delicate knife from his belt
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delerak
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Post by delerak on Nov 5, 2015 2:37:02 GMT -5
This was my favorite scene to write so far and I can't wait to revisit it at some point.
It didn’t take long for the all-knowing King to turn his all-seeing gaze to Javed, the poor independent courier who knew nothing but cunning, running and laughter. Javed was always skilled with the Way and he knew instantly that this mental force was the strongest force he had ever felt. Javed! You have served my templars well. Now you will serve me! Javed fell to his knees from the crippling power of a Sorcerer-King rending his mind apart. He gritted his teeth until blood seeped down his lip. He felt the compelling force of Hamanu pulling him deeper and deeper into a mindscape, the place between the mind and the reality of Athas itself. Javed blinked heavily, staring up at crimson skies. There above him was Guthay and Ral, the twin moons, and the sun itself burning like a black dying coal in a sky of fire. Javed sat up and knew that he was no longer standing in Joiner’s Square, all around there was desert and he now noticed he sat upon a rock in a tiny oasis. He had a headache and vomited.
A deep rumbling chuckle of amusement sounded from behindhim. Javed turned to see a mental manifestation of Hamanu, the Lion of Urik. Hamanu was a striking figure but as plain as any well-kept Urikite human, standing just under six feet, piercing eyes of coal-black and a healthy face sporting cruel lips and high pronounced cheekbones, with his long golden mane of hair he had an almost leonine appearance. His hair was pulled back in a long black pony-tail with a yellow scarf and he wore a cloak of yellow.
“Well? What do you say to your King?” asked Hamanu in a voice that crackled with thousands of years worth of sorcery and the Way, something inconceivable to mere mortals such as Javed who was now awe-struck beyond comprehension. Hamanu lifted his hands out to his sides displaying himself to Javed for examination. “You haven’t died. That is promising. Most elves do not survive my mindscapes.”
Javed managed to push to his feet and feel down his naked body, he realized he could use the Way here. He focused hard and clothed himself in a simple brown sandcloth cloak. Hamanu cocked an eyebrow. “Impressive.”
Javed’s mind began to recover from the initial shock and he realized again who was before him. Perhaps not physically but nevertheless, he knelt and bowed his head. Hamanu seemed displeased with the display. “Rise elf!” He roared. “I am not here to be worshipped. I have a Palace full of templars for such foolish acts.”
In confusion, Javed arose and met Hamanu’s gaze with his own green eyes.
“That’s better. Ah-yes, there it is, the boldness of the elf. It is only ever the elves that dare to look me in the eye upon first meeting me.” Hamanu took a step forward to gauge Javed’s reaction. The black skinned elf stood still, his mind blank as he tried to will the fear away, but it was not possible, the being before him commanded awe. Javed faltered and looked away.
“You will come to Destiny’s Kingdom.”
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delerak
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Post by delerak on Nov 14, 2015 13:03:05 GMT -5
I'm at 10k words finally. It's been difficult on the ship to write as much as I want but here is another chapter.
The Eve of Battle
Alaric stood in the courtyard, watching several J’karr drill. They were the best money could buy in Urik. Alaric felt uneasy. His King had just entered his mind and warned of an attack on Fort Stel. Why would the Sun Runners attack here? And why the fuck am I here for it. He smoothed his yellow templar’s robe and turned around to face his best friend, Isar Stel the second of his name. “Well? You’re sure it was him?” “I know my King’s presence. It was him.” Alaric stepped closer to Isar. He was reclining on a stone bench. Isar Stel was a short pale man with a long braided goatee. He was heir to the wealthiest Merchant House in Urik. He looked to Alaric fondly. Alaric noticed the look. “You’ll be given all the men I can spare. You know I won’t be any good in a fight.” Alaric nodded. Reached up and grasped the gold medallion. Nothing. Hamanu himself only knew why the medallion wasn’t working. Alaric was a practiced psionicist but he focused his entire life on battle, psychometabolism was the only aspect he ever mastered. He felt that telepathic link from hours ago and Hamanu’s thunderous words still echoed to him from a distance he couldn’t even fathom. ALARIC! Battle comes! Fight them! Arri- It was as if the King of the Mountains, Lion of Urik, the omniscient one had been silenced. Impossible. Alaric worshipped him as a god, despite Hamanu’s insistence otherwise. Alaric grasped his medallion for a long time, hoping to hear from his King again. He was rewarded with the worst thing of all, silence. “You have a safe house?” Alaric looked to Isar with concern. “Yes. Yes. And three half-giant bodyguards. I will be fine.” “I could use them.” Alaric was fond of half-giants and their usefulness in battle. Isar let out a soft chuckle, “They cost a fortune. I’m afraid they stay with me.” Alaric shrugged and looked in the distance as a figure in a black duster approached. “Ah. Captain Khann.” Isar stood. Alaric sized up the leader of the J’karr. He wore his duster tightly about his wiry sun-bronzed frame, was gnarled, older and had a scruffy face with two intensely blue eyes. A mop of blond hair sprouted from his head and was windblown. A vertical scar bisected his eye but hadn’t taken his vision. Everything Alaric could have expected from a J’karr mercenary. Khann stopped in front of them and knelt before Alaric. “My Lord Alaric. Agent Stel” He didn’t stay down for long and rose before Alaric could fully appreciate a J’karr kneeling before him. They were a proud bunch and if he were any other templar it would barely be a nod. “Captain. I hope you and your men are ready to earn your wage.” Alaric watched Khann intently and noticed something off. “What is it? Speak now.” Khann frowned and looked down, “There was an attempt on my life in the officers mess hall my Lord. An elf, no older than a teenager.” Alaric and Isar swapped glances. “I take it you dealt with it?” Alaric probed further. “She is dead my Lord.” Khann spoke with little emotion. “You’ve killed women and children before.” Alaric knew the answer before it came. “Yes of course.” Khann looked between Isar and Alaric. “I won’t dally with you Captain. There is an imminent attack on this fort. Gather your entire force. You have a hundred men here yes?” “Ninety six to be exact.” Alaric nodded. “Organize them into skirmisher units. We’re going to meet them in the fields.” Khann frowned. “My Lord may I suggest that we simply entrench ourselves here. We can defend these walls for days.” Alaric was not used to being disobeyed.“Captain. I’ll afford you this single moment of disobedience. You will learn today why I am the High Templar of the War Bureau. Do as you’re told or I will find someone in your band who will.” Khann managed to swallow and kneel to Alaric before moving off to the drill yard bellowing orders. “J’karr assemble! Assemble on me now!” Alaric knew full well they could defend Fort Stel but he had orders from his King to enter battle.
And he fully intended to do so.
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delerak
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Post by delerak on Nov 14, 2015 13:05:12 GMT -5
Ugh. Sorry for the shitty formatting, I can't use java or anything with the outdated browsers on the ship so trying to edit posts to look good is a pain.
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